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The Second Realm
- A Military Portal Fantasy LitRPG Series
- Narrated by: Todd Menesses
- Series: The Ten Realms: A Military Portal Fantasy LitRPG Series, Book 2
- Length: 21 hrs and 28 mins
- Unabridged Audiobook
- Categories: Science Fiction & Fantasy, Fantasy
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Summary
When Erik and Rugrat entered the ten realms they didn’t know what was going on. They only knew that they had contracted the two week curse.
When entering the second realm they came to understand their character sheets, and part of the system that is called the ten realms. A place that the strong make the rules and the weak cling to them for protection and hope that they might be left in peace.
They passed through the trials of the Beast Mountain Dungeon, taking control of it and becoming the leader of nearly 200 people.
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- scobie
- 05-07-19
the second relum
really enjoyed the first two just a shame I've got to wait for the last 2 to be put on Audible
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- L C
- 07-06-22
cast change.
love the book just wish they didnt change the narrator. its like they changed all the actors after the first session and none of them improve on the original.
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- Cristian Rogerson
- 13-05-22
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So far I am enjoying the ten realms storyline. Though I preferred the narrator of the first book.
This narrator keeps putting on overtly exaggerated east asian accents (as in old school stereotype 'Engrish') which I can't decide if it's a bit racist or if I am just being too sensitive.
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- Mr c mcsheehy
- 24-12-21
Excellent
I usually wait until I've finished a series before writing my reviews.
Books 1-5 in this series are excellent. Great character building and the narrator really brings everyone to life.
Books 6+, I'll never know.
The narrator changes and its hard to tell when a character is speaking or if it's the story being narrated.
Everything is the same. I couldn't finish book 6a (the shortest book in the series).
If you can accept not finishing a series and leaving on a high note, Books 1-5 are great.
If you want to listen to the entire series, listen to samples from Books 6 onwards to see if you fall asleep or not.
The story is still excellent but the narration completely kills it.
I can recommend the book, but I cant recommend the series as a whole.
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- Daryl peter lambrou
- 22-05-21
Amazing
I just can’t get enough of this series the story and detail is amazing the characters development is great
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- Fhilip
- 10-05-21
Great!
Hard to keep up with the story sometimes. Still a realy good so far and exited to get more!
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- Damien
- 11-11-19
It started with a two week curse
This has been a four day curse, I couldn't put it down. After the 4 day curse another curse started called, "Get The Third Realm!"
Has been a good listen, more on progression than fighting but good all the same!
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- Azure Teal
- 04-11-19
This series is awesome
I loved book 2 this story is really growing on me. This one was all about the crafting and it made me so happy and the village smith is one of the funniest people in the book😂 .
On a more serious note I’m realising I only have 1 more book left of the audio books but the series is at book 5? I don’t think I want to switch over to reading coz it’s been a very good listen...
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- Phoenix Dark
- 05-10-19
Decent lit RPG with uncomfortable subplot
Decent enough story, although overuse of the word simple was a bit distracting.
there is a strange subplot with Delilah the apothecary seller being forced to apologize for being the victim which was a bit of a WHAT? moment for me and didn't sit well.
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- Miss
- 02-10-19
Even better than the 1st book
Really enjoyed this book.
Looking forward to the 3rd one highly recommend and well worth the money
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- Chax
- 12-04-19
Magic Guns.
need I say more....well sure I guess I will
Magic guns, adventure, op hero, city building and no harem full of empty headed add nothings. woot
Bonus Star for not being a turkey and cutting this up into several smaller books just to milk the fans.
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- Bill
- 04-06-20
disappointing
I can't believe this book is rated this high. I will no longer believe audible reviews.
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- Bethany
- 12-04-19
A thoughtful series
These novels are not a simple telling of an entertaining series of events. they are a look into the lives and substance of another world. This world has been created in the imagination of a very promising storyteller and brought to life by an excellent dedicated performer. The overall tone is lighthearted and satisfying for those in the mood to hear their good guys to win and bad guys get schooled.
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- Jason
- 14-04-19
Awesome
I love this series, I put it on the same level as "The Land", can't wait for the next two books to be put on Audible.
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- Amazon Customer
- 29-03-20
Love the story idea, hate the writing.
The author has a truly beautiful universe here. It's enjoyable, full of adventure, and contains some truly exceptional characters.
Granted, the plot is rather simplistic and easily predictable, but the universe is still lovely. Unfortunately, despite the fantastic ideas for world-building at play here, and despite the narrator's truly heroic efforts, the author's continued massacre of the English language left me with no choice but to refund.
Poor mechanics just kept getting worse.
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- S. Seigel
- 25-05-19
Better than book 1
The Ten Realms series is shaping up nicely. I an hooked. But as an audible reader I’m also stuck. Hopefully we’ll have another audiobook soon.
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- dear reader
- 18-02-20
terrible(ly) fun
Writing--
this book reads like it was written in a different language, translated to a second language, and finally translated to english. i'm paraphrasing but here's an example:
"beasts ran at the wall while the defenders on the wall secured their position on the wall. wolves dug their claws into the wall and pulled themselves up the wall until they were on top of the wall."
Story--
honestly fun. mixing magic with modern thinking is always an interesting route. "how do we make grenades? lets mix these plants with a spell!!" yeah. i'm into it.
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i cringed for a chapter or two when the reader couldn't figure out how to pronounce the name "Nguyen." I think he said it 6 different ways. i also don't think he's ever heard the word "apothecary." the voices are well defined though and he gets major points for keeping all the accents straight.
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- Amazon Customer
- 11-04-19
New favorite
Now just need to hurry up on book 3&4. The length is awesome, I hate shorter stories. I appreciate the thought put into all the explanations of the crafting processes, homework was done there. Also, tank monk.. enough said
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- Aquatic Kumquat
- 25-06-20
Mediocre but Entertaining
The book is entertaining enough, I bought it after all after listening to the first, but the writing quality isn't anywhere near where it needs to be to get a 4-5 star rating.
The biggest problems are:
- TONS OF EXPOSITION ... OMG this author needs to learn how to "show not tell," sooo many times we are dropped into a random point of view that makes no sense to visit, just so people can say in dialogue that which is common knowledge to everyone in the scene. It's like a really bad anime adapted from a light novel. There are times when this goes away, but way too many hours of this book is spent with silliness like this. It's kind of annoying.
- Juvenile Fart Humor is turned up a notch from the first book and it's just ugh... everything from farting in monsters' mouths, and describing farts and reactions as people enter and leave rooms. It makes me feel like I am listening to a bunch of 10 year olds giggle in a corner.
- Dialogue snippets like “I miss fried chicken and watermelon” seemed kinda racist to me.
- Sometimes words are used redundantly making for really wordy description. For example something is descried as "Faster and Instantaneous." ... if something is instantaneous we know that it is faster than something that isn't.
- The amount of detail added to crafting potions and armor made my eyes glaze over at times.
- The structure of the story is really amateur in that there are PoV shifts that make no sense, to characters that we never visit again. 90% of the time their sole purpose seems to be to to host exposition as people recite common knowledge in the world to each other, or speak their motivations and thoughts aloud to whoever might be listening.
- Grammar errors... There are a bunch of instances where the author doesn't seem to understand that "were" is used in conjunction with plural nouns, and "was" is used with singular ones.
- Incorrect vocabulary used to describe weapons and actions using said weapons.
- Word repetition is an issue. Sometimes the same word will be used 7 times in a few sentences.
If the author can fix these problems these books will be in solid 4-5 star territory. As it is, it feels a little like really long fan fiction. It would be better if an editor had read this.
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- Austin
- 06-05-19
Better and worse.
So. Michael Chatfield. We meet again. I have taken a hiatus since reading your last book so I could get a fresh start. If anyone wants to see my review on the previous book you can go to my listener page. I will come out and say though that I liked the first book better.
*May contain minor spoilers. Contains Spoilers for book 1.
Things better done in the previous book were the miraculous healing and brotherly love. The second realm has healing but it moves on to other things like alchemy, blacksmithing and building up skills. I would say about a third of the book is set aside for crafting. This is great and most of the information is highly researched and detailed.
In book 1, I loved the intense feelings I got, the peril of losing his limbs, struggling to get them back, the brother's love and camaraderie. I loved the joy of the villagers being healed of life long injuries. There was much more peril in the first book compared to this one.
In this book, both brothers outmatch almost everyone in the second realm as soon as they arrive so there is no danger what so ever. You made a good choice with Alva dungeon near the end of the book by the way. It should present a future challenge. *Wink wink*.
The Biggest Qualm I have about this book is Alva... The villagers. Seriously. It was absolutely ridiculous with the timeframe in the previous book so I guess this book is more believable in comparison but still. How can a rowdy group of peasants who got a week of training take down hoards of beasts, and now they are like military commando's out of nowhere. The timespan increases so they have time to train but you don't really mention that. They just sort of poof! know how to ambush, slaughter, maneuver, scheme, plot, conduct military operations and make political power moves. You provide little to no backstory into how they do this other than what we already know from the previous book. They could be done a lot better.
The book was rather mundane to me, felt like set up and am afraid you are falling back into old habits from Emerilia, trying to stretch things out instead of get down to the nitty gritty. Why make a dozen decent books when you can make a few amazing books. OR why make a dozen decent books and make 3 dozen amazing books. Take the time you need to develop the plot, however once it is there don't fluff it up with super technical jargon or needless clutter.
I believe the fourth book will be the most interesting so I will stick around until at least then. I have mixed feelings about the third realm and its botanical wonders... I feel like it will be a slog to get through.
Another thing Michael! NAMES! For crying out loud, I understand you want to keep a theme with the Eastern/Asian culture names of people cities and places. But for a simple folk like me my mind is boggling trying to keep track of unrecognizable yet familiar sounding names. I understand this may be just me and my problem, however you should know your audience. Several times I mixed up important key characters with each other and completely misunderstood what was happening.
I liked the mentors and they felt real to me. You made everyone at the auction sound pretentious so good on you.
My recommendations for future books is to stay conscious of what you are writing and have a friend read your drafts, or publish earlier drafts for special readers to comb through and give you recommendations. Don't ever let anyone change what you write though. You change how you write it so it can be perceived and understood more easily, but don't ever change your content or characters because of someone elses opinion. They should be exactly how you picture them.
TL;DR Great book, first one is better. This one is seems mostly like setup but has important things you can miss.
Thank you for reading this longwinded review. If you are a fan of Litrpg's, I have reviewed dozens and you can go to my listener page to find others you might like. If you are Michael Chatfield, thank you for everything you do and keep up the good work. I am excited to see what our two war heroes get into next!
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