Exceptional narration. Disappointing writing.

I'll start by saying I don't take issue with R18 content. In this book, however, there's no setup for it or lead up. It just kind of happens.

Onto the characters. They're all pretty surface-level tropes and none of them, not even the protagonist, get enough time to be anything more. The MC is the orphan who stumbles onto overpowered abilities and finds out he's the "chosen one" after being whisked away to a fantasy land. The supporting cast consists of a band of male tropes for sidekicks (the stuck up elf, the short nerd, the giant with the weird way of talking and the one guy who gets all the MC's references) and different females for whatever kink the reader might have (goth cougar, punk rocker, and prissy elf).

Narration here was phenomenal. Every character was distinct. The story was narrated with personality and I never once felt as though someone disinterested were droning on to collect a paycheck. Even the R18 sections were well done and those can sometimes come off as cheesy or overacted in books like this. I only wish these narrators had better material to work with.

Story. What can I say? I gave it 1 star. The MC knows how to use his powers in an instant. He's stronger and better with them than the people he learns them from for no apparent reason. Despite his being new to this world of magic he knows more in a day than people who have been practicing it for years. There is little to no tension because any problem that comes up gets solved by a sudden Deus Ex victory. The overuse of pop references and slang directed at otherworldly people who will never get them grows old very quickly. Did I mention that the entirety of the story takes place over the course of 3 days? This novel is about as disappointing as one of these harem fantasy books can get and I go through a lot of them. This is at the bottom of the barrel. You can find better for your credits.

Final thoughts. I won't say I wasted my credit as this book turned me onto some incredible narrators. I'm going to look for more of their works but I'll probably not be revisiting this author.

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Meh

Has some issues, narration was good.

1 ) Way to fast, MC is tossing magic around like a pro only after a few days.
2 ) Zero world building, no limits on the magic etc
3 ) A head master that needs to be fired and put into prison for putting kids in danger.
4 ) Characters that are pretty shallow because the whole fking book was maybe 3 days of time!

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great start

I have no complaints at all with this book. of course the direction is a mystery and no huge stupid cliffhanger. I will gladly purchase the next in series .

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great story so far

9/10 amazing voice acting as always from those 2, amazing story telling if you are in not gamelit harem and like the sexier bits realistically in the story, but not too over the top or chinopiin-esque nasty or horrible and unrealistic virginal type scenes that some *cough* authors have written, world building is good, action is good, system just started being developed and only towards the end do things start wrapping into a well done ball for the next book. if you hate fade to black and/or virgins writing impossibly wierd nasty things this is a good credit. if you just like the genre this one is not over the top even though it is a bit on the nose with the title lol this is a good one. I'm hard to please and cant stand ftb scenes, even worse when a virgin like chinopiin and co. write things that are sometimes impossible physically and make no sense, this didnt check any of those boxes, but checked all the good ones so far. just praying book 2 doesnt break all of those tropes and continues this great masterwork in the genre of sexy scene having harem gamelit that isnt just a copy. I'm pleased. thanks everyone who made this! (no I did not get this copy for free... sadly because I deserve it and have been scammed by the bad writers and audibles great-read guarentee lol) book 2 is on track to be my first soliddd 10/10.
would suggest ;P

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Love it!

Fun book and love the characters, plus you have Marissa as a va so that’s all you need... can’t wait to hear the next one

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Excellent take on unlocking magic in a modern time

Excellent take on unlocking magic in a modern time. Good use of humor and foreshadowing to draw you in and keep you guessing, and the sex encounter feel natural to the story and not forced. only improvement I would suggest is to explain the boundaries of magic and how it relates to the person's level and how a person increases there level.

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Really?

Mc is a tool, a poseur, a wannabe and an idiot. Narrators are great, sex is bland, great world building, the women's choices are baffling, but women usually do choose tools and idiots

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loved it great book great characters and storyline

loved it great book great characters and storyline with great world building on top of that

not my cup of tea

I need to enter 15 words but the voice actors were good but the story was not what I was expecting.

This reads like the fantasy of a horny teenage boy

There's no substance to this story. The MC gets all the power, all the girls, all the guys like him, he's the center of the universe and no struggle too hard to overcome. He learns magic one day and the next day he's using it like an expert.