The author seems to keep forgetting who is own characters are and what happened to them. In the first book, the criminals brother Greg gets lynched by a vigilante mob. In the second book, it turns out the criminal killed him in a car accident that he had a hand in. And then there is the switching of young victims names from Allison to Brittany. Huh??
Aside from this total confusion, all the authorities are so unprofessional. Police, FBI and the main character behave in the most ridiculous way.
And speaking of main character - I just don't get it/her. Its never explained why she left the police force. Was she sacked, was she injured, was she too traumatised to continue after her partner was shot dead (the latter being something else that was never explained)? And how is that she manages to round up the criminals family if she isn't even on the job any more? But as soon as her daughter gets kidnapped the FBI let her run around calling the shots. She even makes the decisions to have the criminals family released.
Over all, the box set was pretty good. The first two books, by Hayden, would only have gotten 2 stars on their own. The story wasn't very interesting or exciting, and the characters were not very well developed. There were a lot of "characters" who were just names, which caused some confusion and made it hard to keep up with who was doing what. I didn't really care much about the story, I just wanted to get through it.
Hayden's three books were a much better story. The characters were well developed, and it was a much better "page turner" mystery. I did get tired of all the repeated comments about cracking necks and knuckles. Even though I was disappointed with the ending, I enjoyed the story. I might have given it 4 stars, except for what I'll comment on next.
Like so many of these indie ebooks, they need somebody to sit down and proofread these things before they're put out there for the public. Missing/repeated words, using wrong words (words that sound alike but are spelled differently), misspellings (even character's names), words out of order in sentences, and horrible punctuation (commas in the wrong place can change the meaning of a sentence!). I love that new authors can get their work to the public like this, but they really need to be more concerned about the quality of the finished product. Running into these types of errors really throws me off and can ruin an otherwise decent story.
5.0 out of 5 starsA lot of surprises along the way ... it will keep you up because you want to see what happens next ...
7 August 2016 - Published on Amazon.com
Format: Kindle EditionVerified Purchase
I don't usually read murder mysteries, but I really enjoyed each of these books. Each was predicated upon violent acts, but the details weren't as graphic as what you see on tv. The thing that I found unusual is, though written by a man, the hero was a heroine -- women with strong convictions of justice, good and evil, right and wrong. The last heroine, a homicide detective, was ostracized by her co-workers and subjected to retaliation by her superior for doing the right thing.
The storyline was interesting but never fully developed, as if the characters were only two dimensional. There could have been much to like about Miriam if she acted like a trained, intelligent police person. Dumb mistakes abound. What was most annoying, however, were the numerous typos and glaring editing errors. In one sentence, there's sipping from a glass/cup but the next sentence has a bottle of water instead. And whole phrases are repeated within the same sentence. On and on... This set could be salvaged with responsible editing and realistic scenarios. The author had good intentions but needs polishing and commitment to the defining details. Miriam and Philip lack depth and their interactions lack believability. Logistical planning is sketchy. I barely made it through the third mini-book. Wanted to love it.
This was very enjoyable reading. I liked that the protagonists are women, and most of the descriptive narrative is good. One note: I am a reader who cares about spelling and grammar. These books seemed at times to be plagued with typos, sentence fragments, and other editing errors. It seems likely that the authors relied on spell checking, which won't help with most of these. For instance, different forms of "there" and typos "clam" and "calm". You guys just needed a pair of human eyeballs to do the final read. I would love to do that duty, because I really did enjoy the read. Very good story lines, lots of action, great characters. Even with the minor editing inconsistencies, you are not wasting your time to devote to reading this series. Authors: if you want someone to do a final proof for you, get in contact with me.